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masterrbc

check out my poem for english :P now!!!! :P:P:P
« on: 21 Nov 2011, 02:52:11 »
Like my thoughts, there is an end.
But now I lay paralysed.
I Cannot stand, I cannot bend.
I should have realised, I am not dead.
 
I remember sitting with a friend .
And playing pretend.
When she shot me a smile.
The phone I would soon dial.
 
As we shout " Charge!" "CHARGE!"
I realise we have lost the sarge .
But I lay in a  rotting drain.
I say to myself " you will not die in vein!"
 
I had fired my gun.
It shot as fast as a cheetah could run.
I saw my bullets hit him in the head.
It split apart, like a katana cutting it in half.
 
The fruit that I stab at breaks.
My instructor says " your fruit killing skills are remarkable mate".
As we shot the targets for fun.
I wake up at point blank of a gun.
 
A few hours later, me and Ben .
Lay soaked by the fireside.
We are safe inside our den,
An hour earlier we almost died.
 
The gun exploded in my hand.
Like my hopes and dreams.
They sink in the sand.
The hope of survival is now a small gleam.
 
A week later we are running through a forest.

tell me what you guys think of it! :P

Jayjay36

Re: check out my poem for english :P now!!!! :P:P:P
« Reply #1 on: 21 Nov 2011, 03:46:06 »
Nice work master! :D. It's about the war I think?

Geoboy66

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« Reply #2 on: 21 Nov 2011, 03:47:08 »
This is really good, you should make more! :)

masterrbc

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« Reply #3 on: 21 Nov 2011, 04:04:56 »
thanks guys, it is about war, so that is a yes, and geo i may if i get bored, also geo have u read the last message i sent you?!?!?!?

Geoboy66

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« Reply #4 on: 21 Nov 2011, 04:53:38 »
Can't wait :)

masterrbc

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« Reply #5 on: 21 Nov 2011, 10:00:58 »
well, this is something else i did this term in EN, they are similies, but they are good....
Life is like war, people die, people live, we move on.
Life is like playing Russian roulette, you never know who will go first.
Life is like death, the longer we live, the longer we prolong death.
Life is like a IED, you will go past it, until you are gone.
Life is like burning yourself with fire, in the end, you have no feeling.
Life is like getting a haircut, you don't feel it until you get your ear cut off.
Life is like shaving your face, it's  painless until you cut your neck.
Life is like neutering yourself, there is no dignity in it.
Life is like shooting yourself, it is all talk and no walk, until you kill yourself.
Life is like killing someone you hate, in the end we are all satisfied.

also i will post a small bit of what i may be working on, it is below enjoy my friends :P

On a hill sitting with a friend.
I never realised he had a barrette.
When he said we were without Ben.
I said "he was my pal, Brett"

The next day sitting in a barge.
I say "hey sarge'.
She just looked and shot me with a smile.

Before she was under a mile under the barge.

Jayjay36

Re: check out my poem for english :P now!!!! :P:P:P
« Reply #6 on: 21 Nov 2011, 16:21:36 »
Nice work man :D
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